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  1. JadeM

    JadeM Lost in Translation

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    Thank you scorpion62287!
     
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  2. JadeM

    JadeM Lost in Translation

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    Thank you for taking the time to review it. I also appreciate the input. :)

    I will make a point of reading one of yours soon.

    Again, thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
     
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  3. Rutger5

    Rutger5 Sex Machine

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    Jade:

    Overall a good read in my opinion. There were some errors, no more than a lot of other stories though. Might help if you proofed/edited more or asked someone else to help with that (new set of eyes and all).


    There was a lot of set up, not uncommon for you and not a bad thing in itself. One of my stories was over 6,000 words and all that had happened to that point was a neckrub. Only criticism from me was that before the sex part the set up was kind of dry with no tension built toward the eventual sex that took place. If she had mentioned earlier what a sexual and submissive woman she was before getting to the nuts and bolts about their histories, just to give a hint of what was coming.

    Now the sex part, this being a sex story site. Bravo, kudos Jade! Very hot and descriptive and well done IMO. The bondage, the step incest, all the detail - very good.

    Too bad Don didn't reach that point as it would have put some lead in his pencil I believe.;)

    r5
     
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  4. JadeM

    JadeM Lost in Translation

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    Thank you very much for reading and giving a details review! I appreciate that very much! :)

    btw... I think you have valid points, thank you.
     
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  5. hardoneforgirl

    hardoneforgirl Porn Star Suspended!

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    Great story Jade. I encourage you to continue with this thread.
     
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  6. okieblueyes

    okieblueyes Sex Machine

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    I for one enjoyed it on the story site and gave it a positive rating . Very Intense sex scenes and well written
     
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  7. hi man

    hi man Newcumer

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    hi nice one:rose:
     
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  8. Woodman12

    Woodman12 Sex Lover

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    Hi Jade, I read a lot of incest stories on this site and as an Englishman the use of American English doesn't bother me in the least. I enjoyed this story very much. Thank you.
     
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  9. 1ThickCock

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    Wow. Wonderful and very hot story.
     
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  10. BLKPOET

    BLKPOET Porno Junky

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    GREAT, Great story, just wondering, did he "HIT" it again???????
     
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  11. sammy21673

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    Great story Jade.
     
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  12. pornlover2112

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    Great Story Jade, I really Do like it alot. I would welcome a sequel, starting with the aftermath of what happened.
     
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  13. scottishlad01

    scottishlad01 Porno Junky

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    good read, need a bit more detail in the sex
     
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  14. Wolf_Knight

    Wolf_Knight Porno Junky

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    I liked the story

    I liked the story and the character development was great. I'll agree that most of the issues I can see are the same ones I'm getting feedback on with the story I've been writing. I get notes about grammar most often, I look forward to reading stories focused on the characters developing. Keep up the good work and keep writing and everything is likely to improve.
     
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  15. HankWilliams1956

    HankWilliams1956 Amateur

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    I found this story to be a good story and it seemed to me to be well written.
     
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  16. deleted user 555867

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    Everyone should check out her other stories. They are GREAT.
     
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  17. larrydownunder

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    Superb

    I love Jades stories. They always excite and get me so damn hard. Everyone should read them
     
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  18. darthel0101

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    This is the second comment where the length of the setup is criticised.

    This critique is not warranted on a story which we do not KNOW is ended. If there is more of the story to be written then the build up could be very much a NEEDED part of that story. If the story ends here then it still allowed a depth of connection to the situation which made it more alive than if it were omitted or shortened.

    BTW - The only time (I HOPE) where I comment on grammar is when it has so severely impacted the story that I have trouble reading it. This story was NOT impacted and I would have to re-read it with that in mind to actually find examples from which to pick nits.

    This story left me with a feeling that it has not been finished; I hope that I am correct.
     
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  19. Spefleskvek

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    Yes

    ***
     
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  20. Ramrod100

    Ramrod100 Sex Lover

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    Great Story!!!! Super Hot!!!! I give you a 100.
     
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