Oh my... Thank you all for so much wonderful feedback.

I am going to have to write another chapter for this... It is almost like it is a necessity!

I do apologize that my English is not as good as some would expect from a person posting stories. I have also noticed the many kind remarks concerning the necessity of letting some things go by.

Thank you all for your support and kindness, the suggestions, and even the more critical comments.

 

Hot as hell! Can you be my step-mom? Lol i sent you a pm too

 

like this

 

I liked this; even though I'm not into B&D, I am into mother/son stories. I wouldn't worry about your spelling and grammar, as long as it doesn't get in the way of the narrative flow. If you are concerned, however, you could always write and edit in Word (or similar) with the language set on US English — it should pick up most "mistakes" — then copy and paste here.

 

naughty naughty

Very sexy. Great story

 

Nice work

I read the whole story, found it to well thought out and you did a great job expressing the emotional side quite well. The physical act were done in some good detailed. Giving some insight into the submission thought process very good. The physical appearance of David, Patrick and Dr. Watanabe is a little lacking. How did David learn to dominate her, he seem so comfortable about it when it is obvious that he was not with his first wife? How long was David and the Doctor together? I see where this could be expanded to a very longer series. I would loke to read more of you work.

 

Nice read,I see a sub wife,that is in need of more than her husband is giving her,when her stepson confronts her,she feels torn at first, until yielding to his desires,she now has a new Jr dom to service! Yes i enjoyed it!! Thank you

 

I loved your story it gripped me until the end - Love to you

 

Very good story. Good lead up, good story line. Very hot sex scenes. I can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you.

 

very good

 

To me its a nice story u took ur time writing that's an effort u put tnx keep it up

 

Great story, I think maybe people are less used to the submissive side? Everybody wants to be in control, its hard to appreciate that the control is given, not just taken. Sure there are minor syntax and grammatical errors but they do not take from the story... As a matter of fact they add to it. Assuming she is a ESL person albeit educated.

 

Great story, I think maybe people are less used to the submissive side? Everybody wants to be in control, its hard to appreciate that the control is given, not just taken. Sure there are minor syntax and grammatical errors but they do not take from the story... As a matter of fact they add to it. Assuming she is a ESL person albeit educated.

 

Great story, I enjoyed reading it. Not sure why it is getting poor ratings. Sure there are errors, but those errors add to the story, as I assume she is ESL even though highly educated.

 

Really good story very erotic very sexy. Spelling errors have been stated already but the flow of the beginning seems really choppy to me. Maybe your trying to rush through the setup understandably.